Tuesday, November 18, 2008

Rough draft numero 2

When a mother raises her child to grow up to be healthy and successful, it is only appropriate for the child to show gratitude for everything the mother has done. The values she taught while growing up are life-long values that will be carried and used everyday. Embrace and use those values to continue to grow as a person, create a great life. Unfortunately, not everyone is always as appreciative as they should be. In some cases the child is too foolish to appreciate what the mother has done for them, and they reject the mother completely. This is the case of England and New England where England is the mother of New England. The people of the colonies should be thankful instead of resentful towards her. Breaking away from England will only degrade all the standards and qualities that the great colony of Delaware was founded upon, as well as harm the people both politically and economically.

One of the areas that separating from England will hurt Delaware is the politics. In the Delaware Bill of Rights it states, “That all government of right originates from the people, is founded in compact only, and instituted solely for the good of the whole.” In order to properly govern with this in mind, the people of Delaware will have to do what is best for the colony. Breaking away from England certainly is not the best for the colony because it will only hurt trade since England is responsible for much of the colony’s profit from imports and exports. So in the case that Delaware was to separate from her, there will be hostility between the two and the trade market will go down in ruins. Also, ignoring the Bill of Rights will show that there is no pride in Delaware because that would be knowingly disobeying one vital part of the foundation Delaware was built upon.

The idea of breaking away from England has made the Patriots forget many of their learned morals and values. In the Delaware Bill of Rights it states, “that every freeman for every injury done him in his goods, lands, or person, my another person, ought to have remedy by the course of the law of the land, and ought to have justice and right for the injury done to him freely without sale, fully without any denial, and speedily without delay, according to the law of the land.” Since the Patriots burned the idea in their skulls that the only right thing to do was to break away from England, they have forgotten this basic right. There are many Loyalists that have had their property destroyed by the Patriots simply because they do not wish to separate from England. Other than those acts being despicable and morally wrong, it will also make Delaware’s economics suffer. It hurts the economics because property is ruined and damage bills add up, causing financial problems. Eventually the financial fight to re-build or fix broken properties will be a battle that the victims cannot win. In effect, it will only set up Delaware for financial ruin.

Economics will also greatly suffer from any separation from England. In 1723 and 1729 Delaware was going through some economic crises. It is shown that, “Delaware issued currency to combat depressions in the early part of the eighteenth century. After creating the currency to assist Delaware, it was said that the beneficial effects of this first act were so immediate that on November 2, 1723, a second Act was passed providing for the further issuance. This fact supports the fact that Delaware can begin to support itself in order to stay strong, but it also needs the additional help from England. The first time this crisis happened was in 1723, and then the same thing happened in 1729. Based on the repeating patterns it is shown that if there was no support from England, Delaware will surely fall once again into financial ruins because they need all he extra support they can get.

In one instance, lots of illegal smuggling was taking place in Delaware. The British stepped in, in order to help fix the smuggling problem. It was sad that, “Consequently the state of illicit trade would be a better indication of the effects of the British legislation, especially upon the trade of this district, than either the number of new manufactures or the fluctuations of the amount turned into the exchequer. One of the chief aims of the new acts was the prevention of illicit trade.” Basically all this is saying is that the British want to help out and stop the smuggling so other local manufactures can make more profit. According to the English, “The chief aim was to make the empire self-sufficing, and as a means to this end it was thought that the mother country should furnish necessary protection to the colonies, who, in return, should render her obedience.” That kind of thinking makes complete sense because England is helping Delaware out, which means that Delaware is supposed to, by moral, stay loyal and obedient to England.

True loyalists know the importance of staying faithful to their mother England. It is known that Delaware is in England’s debt. In the Petition of American Loyalists, 1778, it is said that, “We [loyalists] have taken the Liberty to address ourselves to your Lordship on this Subject; and we entreat your Lordship to communicate to his Majesty our Desires to serve him and Readines to Sacrifice our Lives in Defence of his Person and Government” It is all clearly stated in that document, that the people of the colonies still love the King and understand the importance of preserving the mother and child relationship that is made so strong. Delaware and other colonies are willing to do anything in order to serve the king, which means that there is no reason to break away from England and ruin their relationship.

4 comments:

Miss Amber Kristine :) said...

Great work Bre.

I loved the intro, good way to bring the reader in
You tell the reader exactly what the quotes mean, you don't leave them hanging
you have a few grammatical errors but those can be easily fixed
citations need to be inserted
and as a whole it is very....argumentive.
you support the loyalists (right?) very well

overall, the paper was rather good :]

alysters said...

i think overall you did an good job!... what i am concerned about is this "One of the areas that separating from England will hurt Delaware is the politics. In the Delaware Bill of Rights it states, “That all government of right originates from the people, is founded in compact only, and instituted solely for the good of the whole.”

i thought that this essay was suppost to be written in the time frame before revolutionary war. which makes me question, did delaware have a bill of right before the revolutionary war? i thought they got that after they won separation from Britain. you might want to talk to ben just to make sure... :)

HannahSinger2014 said...

- I like how you used the metaphor Ben gave us, but in a new, inventful way. It was very clever.
- I don't see much I say in this. It seems a bit factual. Craig told us to put it in the view of the colonist, so you might want to add some pronouns (like I, we, our, etc).
- It was a very good, argumentative paper.

Amber Springer said...

Bre-

The first thing I saw was that your intro metaphor was.. veeery extended.

I could come into treading this, and for the first 5 sentences, I could have been reading in into in a parenting book. (no offense, I promise) Can we keep the metaphor, but trim it a little, or keep it as it, but make your thesis more to the beginning?

Nice job on addressing the rubric topics, you have politics and economics int he topic sentences which is GREAT. Really well done on that.

Yeah, I would say make your position more prevalent in the essay, and you have yourself a winner. Good job.